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Rusty metal falls from the roof as the grass moves slowly in the silent wind . The wet damp grass is as thick as a round ball. I crept into the unstable haunted house I fell onto a soaking narrow, floor I smell fear I hear the mad lightning storm I walked unstably down the spaceless hallway and then I saw a bright light, I looked relieved but a girl was standing there ‘h.h hello’ I mysteriously said. The girl was dripping, sores cover her face that attract flies and worms. Ekkey, I got out of the silent house.
That must be a really yucky house your punctuation and description is amazing
Great job! I really like your story.
Keep up the good work!
I realy love your story although their are a couple of mistakes brilliant though.
Excellent use of adjectives and a good setting of the scene. Please make sure you read through what you have written to ensure that the punctuation you use gets the right message across to your reader. Well done!