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The celebration was absolutely hysterical!!!!! Though my mum invited the most annoying person in the neighbourhood!! His name is Daniel, he acts like a demented gorilla!! Then . . . BANG, the fireworks started for a exceptional New Year!! BANG BANG . . . and then I saw a bright lightshine on me. Mum shouted out “HAPPY NEW YEAR” The light was the disco light . Now I remember that I need to dance my heart out! I love New Years. I am so looking forward the start of a new beginning that awaits all of us. I hope everyone has a HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!! I will start the new year with a big surprise!!!!!!!!!
Hi Kayleigh,
Wonderful writing, one thing for you to work on next time is make sure you use the line “and then I saw a bright light” but everything thing else was fine and you used good description. Keep up the good work Kayleigh.
Charlotte
Year 6 student
St Andrews, Walkerville,
Adelaide, Australia
Hello Kayleigh!
Great work!!! I noticed you didn’t really use the given prompt!!! Next time try and include it! Keep up the awesome writing!
Caleb
Year 6 Student
St Andrews, Walkerville,
Adelaide, Australia
Thanks so much Caleb and Charlotte for your comments if you look directly after where Kayleigh has written ‘Bang Bang’ you’ll see where she used the prompt for the this weeks challenge.
We look forward to your interactions with our blog and writing in the future.
Kind regards
Mrs Joyce
I love the way how you have strong words in your 107 wc
Well done Kayleigh! I really enjoyed reading your 100 word challenge. I think you have used some excellent vocabulary in your writing. My favourite part is where you say Daniel acts like a demented gorilla! Thank you for sharing this with us, I look forward to reading more of your 100wc!
Mrs Smithson
Year 3 Teacher, Manchester, England
Hi, great 100wc. I especially like ‘acts like a demented gorilla’. Just remember to use the prompt next time. 🙂