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SUDDENLY I HEARD A CRACK…
Nipper Cracker at so much junk food that he pretty much turned into a ball. People said that he was to round to do anything that all the other kids could do. Nipper was so furious, he was like a rhino stampeding at you and so he said he could brake dance, no one believed him so he started to brake dance I thought he was just showing off …SUDDENLY I HEARD A CRACK… Then he disappeared with a hole in the ground never to be seen again.
Hey James, really like your writing, especially your metaphor …. he was like a rhino stampeding at you. Just remember to check your writing like ‘break dancing’.