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Ashlee’s 100 Word Challenge
I stand in where the crashing and tumbling waves and the crunching golden sand meets. I look out to the horizon and start to climb the pointy sharp rocks. I stand and feel the wind in my hair, the waves are splashing over me while holding on. I turn to walk back because the waves are getting bigger an bigger, but I see humongouse foot prints in the sand. WHOOSH, I get knocked over by a strong wave. I stagger up to the shore, and they’re gone?? Was I dreaming? Was it fake? I will never know, but I want to know….
Hello Ashlee,
Your opening sentences show you have an good grasp of descriptive words. You were able to paint pictures in my mind of an experience along a beach. This is a very important skill in writing because it can take your readers to the worlds you create. Well done. 🙂
Your use of the prompt photo was interesting. You didn’t choose to explain what made them. You saw them for a brief time only to have them disappear under a wave. By leaving the possibilities open, you invite the reader to use their imagination or set yourself up for a possible sequel. We are also left wondering if the footprints were real or the product of too much sun and surf on a day at the beach. Perhaps in a future story we will learn what happened. I enjoy a mystery. 🙂
If I can make a suggestion, towards the end there seemed to be a little confusion over tense. Your story shared experiences as they were happening (e.g. I get knocked over and I stagger up) but your questions at the end suggest the past (Was I dreaming? instead of Am I dreaming?). It can be very easy to make errors in tense when writing. It’s something I often have to correct when I write.
I hope you continue to enter the 100WC. Writing allows us to create worlds of our own and share them with others. 🙂
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia