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Peter Patter, Junkfood eater started the entree as he burned through a packet of crunchy Doritos and cooled it down with a Big M milkshake. He chomped through a gullet size of golden chips but thought to himself “But I wonder I would do if I ate more?” He slurped and crunched and gulped though heaps more unhealthy food until his belly bloated with food getting bigger and bigger until he popped like a bubble!
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It was the game of the century, I heard the crowd roaring as the game went on. I bet you right now while reading you’re thinking, why is it the game of the century? I’ll tell you why for the last 2 years our rivals the Tommahawks have been defeating us, all I want is to beat them. It was my free the score was 61-69 and I kicked, before the ball went through the goals it POPS! The ball exploded. I stood there frozen. I was devastated, I could slip into a hole. But I wonder what I would do next?
This is the 100 word challenge is where you have to write/type 100 words or less in one paragraph. once you have finished you can enter it on this site And it goes global. Here is example.
I was sitting out in front of the big, tall Eiffel Tower. I was just sitting there waiting to get inside at the end of the long distance, twisty line waiting to get inside the mesmerising site. This business man came up to me and said”I own the Eiffel Tower, how would you like to own the Eiffel Tower. I said yes. But then I wondered what I would do because I could be getting all the money that people pay. ” Well when do you want the Eiffel” Tower. I said now or when ever.
I see Amy left an entry in your comments box. Perhaps she can also enter the 100WC. Having sat near the Eiffel Tower, I wonder what she might charge tourists to ride the lifts up? She would collect many Euros I think. 🙂
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hi Ross,
I have just entered many of the students work on the challenge be forum. This has been an amazing spark to our Writers Workshop in the classroom. Thank you to the 100w challenge for the opportunity.
Bronwyn Joyce – 5/6j Classroom Teacher
I have been helping Julia and the 100WC since the beginning. It’s been great to see the number of Aussie schools starting to join in. 🙂
And more to come Ross. There is 9 classes of Grade 3 – 6 at our school and we are hoping to involve all. I am leading the 5 grade 5/6 classes to get involved ASAP and we have integrated into our writing for this terms literacy program.
Hello Ben,
Just a little 100WC background… I am a member of Team 100WC. We have a series of entries where we visit and leave a comment. Yes, there are Australian Team 100WC members. Your entry fell into my group but I couldn’t access it. I found this link to your entry. You may also have another Team 100WC member visit as your entry was in two positions.
You have made good use of the prompt in your story about Peter Patter. There is no doubt Peter was heading for a great deal of trouble if he continued his diet. While good for a treat, Doritos, flavoured Big M and chips might fill you but not with what our bodies need to be healthy. For poor Peter Patter, the warning came too late. We can’t unpop a bubble. 🙂
I can see the care you have taken with spelling and punctuation. Your use of descriptive words enhances your story. I particularly liked your final sentence. The imagery you created through your words added to your story. Well done.
Considering the quality of what I believe to be your first 100WC entry, I know you enjoy sharing a good story. I hope you continue to enter the 100WC.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Thanks! Hope you enjoyed it!! 🙂
Ben, I enjoyed reading you story. I liked the decriptive words you used. I was wondering what was going to happen at the end. Pop!!! What a surprise. Don’t let it happen to you!